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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
08-04-2005, 12:06 PM
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Perception
This world
is not a real one...
solid
tangible to fingers seeking
accountable to time and morality
restrictions
it is it's own
a private
secret place
where all are welcome
and none belong.
Feeding happily
on dark and lonely
it thrives
offering up a myriad
of vistas
consolations and deprivations
degradations
joy and hope
intertwined.
Not unreal either
for it yet exists
in the mind
and heart
Alive
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08-05-2005, 01:22 PM
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huh.
this is trippy.
i can't quite put my finger on it...
enlighten me a bit? possibly, nola?
vodka
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08-05-2005, 01:30 PM
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One shot of enlightenment, coming up 
It's about life on the internet, although I'm sure that it could sound like it applied to any number of things, depending on individual experience.
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08-05-2005, 01:37 PM
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ahhhh... i can see clearly now, the rain is gone... nola.
thank you very much... i shall re-read a bit now.
vodka
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08-05-2005, 01:39 PM
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It's gonna be a briiiiiight... briiiiiiight... sunshiny dayyyyyy. *dances in chair* I love that song 
You're more than welcome. Hope you enjoy it more the second time around, lol.
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That's the way, uh-huh uh-huh, I like it, uh-huh uh-huh...
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08-05-2005, 02:06 PM
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it confused me the first time around too 
Good poem though... even when I was confused the first time I was thinking "this is excellent!... I have no clue what it means... but this is excellent!" and the second time it was just "this is excellent!" so... this is excellent!
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08-05-2005, 02:11 PM
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I liked it first read, I thought you were a hippy straight from the 60's and were tripping on acid (I am so teasing). It makes sense both ways, lol. Good write Nola.
Nae ;0)
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08-05-2005, 02:28 PM
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smalls- don't feel alone, lol. I've had hit and miss luck with people knowing what I was talking about in this particular poem. 'Excellent' made my day 
Nae- I missed the 60's, but I have my flower child moments, acid notwithstanding. Glad you liked it
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08-06-2005, 09:38 PM
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I meant to ask this earlier... does anyone think that these two lines are awkward, or is it just me?
Quote:
offering up a myriad
of vistas
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I'm not sure what's bugging me about it... I like the word 'vistas', but something's just not feeling quite right. Maybe it's just me.
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That's the way, uh-huh uh-huh, I like it, uh-huh uh-huh...
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