inamorato - Page 2 - Writers Forum

huni · 07-22-2005, 02:10 AM

Okay - I don't know what this says about me - but I liked this A and got what you said as I read it. Well - about half of it. The acronyms I never knew before. And some of the other stuff. But the rest and the feelings - got ALL of that. Nice. Warm regards huni.

Good on you penne, not surprised you and your son are like that. h.

dannyboy · 07-22-2005, 02:25 AM

huni how did you get it was familial (?) love and not 'Love' love?

huni · 07-22-2005, 02:47 AM

Danny, I'm not sure I know entirely. Perhaps it matched and met something in myself. That 'something', that relates to the tentative questioning of the child who hopes for a positive answer. I definitely felt the hopeful but anxious tone of the last line. Familial? I'm not sure that it need only be between child and parent or a similar relationship. Some adult relationships (i.e. sexual, marriage, etc.) can have that uncertainty ("..don't you?") that comes, not from the current experience but from the activation of the inner child's unresolved issues and unmet needs. Maybe - now I think about it - it was my own inner child (who rarely heard those words when small ) that was touched by this little piece.

I thought I was jesting just a little with my comment to A, but now in answering your query, Danny, maybe it is more likely that my comment was almost all serious. huni(child).

PS. Are you the ghost?

A · 07-22-2005, 03:28 AM

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Originally Posted by mswietek

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Originally Posted by A

i spent almost 2 whole days dwelling on 5 words. 5 words that physically and psychologically effect me in ways that have haunted me for 18 years.

Ok. Your explanation explains a lot. What I think you need to realize (and which dannyboy alludes to) is that there isn't enough to your poem to pull that out. Giving the reader some more insight as to why these words are haunting in the poem itself, will go a long way towards creating in the reader the feelings you want to convey.

Michael

i do understand what your saying. however we must, by right of having a brain, USE our imagination. do we need further words to conveniently paint out the situation, rather than imagine the tone of how its spoken.

nevertheless, i do appreciate all your comments.

dannyboy · 07-22-2005, 05:52 AM

huni - yes i am the Ghost - I hope that is a good thing

A I get that but what i want is for you to do that much work with the words and give me an image as well - yes i want it all. Then i get a double whammy, the reverberations with these words so precisely chosen and that of the image drawn. This, for me, is almost too splatter painting type. Might look good, interesting shapes, nice splotches, but no picture, and for me, no meaning.

gordon · 07-23-2005, 06:26 PM

This is without doubt the most arrogant peice I have ever seen on these forums
I love it
G

A · 07-23-2005, 10:20 PM

daz · 07-24-2005, 07:48 AM

Whats alll the fuss about? I get it. Its not as trivial as everyones making it out to be. Its simple and needs a medal for easy reading I reckon.Though I did expect more from A, he's got that something special.

A, loosen up, I think your capable of more than your leading on. Give us all something to marvel at. No pressure.

mammamaia · 07-24-2005, 09:49 AM

all i can add to this discussion is that the italian word for in love/true love/boyfriend/sweetheart [masc.] has a double 'n'... it's 'innamorato'...

hope i'm not out of line to mention that... hugs, m

A · 07-24-2005, 11:43 PM

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dictionary.com
in·am·o·ra·to ( P ) n. pl. in·am·o·ra·tos
A man with whom one is in love or has an intimate relationship

tiscali.co.uk
inamorato
n. (fem. -ta) lover; beloved person.

you are right too mamma. and no your not out of line.

A · 07-24-2005, 11:54 PM

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Originally Posted by daz

Whats alll the fuss about? I get it. Its not as trivial as everyones making it out to be. Its simple and needs a medal for easy reading I reckon.Though I did expect more from A, he's got that something special.

A, loosen up, I think your capable of more than your leading on. Give us all something to marvel at. No pressure.

daz, fyi . im not a he

AND i am loose. its others opinions that are tight. i can handle it though, but it does hurt. it is my first time on the grill plate, so i suppose i need to earn the stripes of resilience. however, i dont like to be over cooked, it makes me awfully tough

huni · 07-25-2005, 12:34 AM

Gigi, I fell straight into your link and now my mouth won't stop laughing. THANK YOU!! No - really. Gull Able (formally known as huni)

A · 07-25-2005, 01:01 AM

much thanks to you gigi

huni · 07-25-2005, 01:12 AM

The mouths, noses and eyes inside the heads of my sister and I would like to report the sheer joy we feel at knowing another crazy mind exists in this world. One that shares our sense of humour. h.

A. thank you for the lend of your thread. h.

A · 07-25-2005, 01:45 AM

ive thought about the 'art' aspect...behold...the revised Inamorato

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YOU love ME - you LOVE me - you love ME - YOU LOVE ME - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me -you love me ...dont you? ...dont you? .....dont you?.....DONT YOU!? - you: human entity - love: solicitude / emotion - me: I - dont: NO - Y.O.U = Your Opinion Unwanted - Y.O.U = Your Own Universe - L.O.V.E = Linguistics of Visual English - L.O.V.E = Look Observe Verify Enjoy - L.O.V.E = Loss of Valuable Energy - M.E = Marriage Encounter - M.E = Mature Equivalent - M.E = Mental Endurance -M.E = Mental Excellence - D.O.N.T = Disturbing Opponents' No Trump! - YOU love ME - you LOVE me - you love ME - YOU LOVE ME - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me -you love me ...dont you? ...dont you? .....dont you?.....DONT YOU!? you: human entity - love: solicitude / emotion - me: I - dont: NO Y.O.U = Your Opinion Unwanted - Y.O.U = Your Own Universe - L.O.V.E = Linguistics of Visual English - L.O.V.E = Look Observe Verify Enjoy -L.O.V.E = Loss of Valuable Energy - M.E = Marriage Encounter - M.E = Mature Equivalent - M.E = Mental Endurance - M.E = Mental Excellence -D.O.N.T = Disturbing Opponents' No Trump! YOU love ME - you LOVE me - you love ME - YOU LOVE ME - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me -you love me ...dont you? ...dont you? .....dont you?.....DONT YOU!? you: human entity - love: solicitude / emotion - me: I - dont: NO Y.O.U = Your Opinion Unwanted - Y.O.U = Your Own Universe - L.O.V.E = Linguistics of Visual English - L.O.V.E = Look Observe Verify Enjoy -L.O.V.E = Loss of Valuable Energy - M.E = Marriage Encounter - M.E = Mature Equivalent - M.E = Mental Endurance - M.E = Mental Excellence - D.O.N.T = Disturbing Opponents' No Trump! YOU love ME - you LOVE me - you love ME - YOU LOVE ME - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me -you love me ...dont you? ...dont you? .....dont you?.....DONT YOU!? ............... you love me, ..dont you?
- you: human entity - love: solicitude / emotion - me: I - dont: NO - Y.O.U = Your Opinion Unwanted - Y.O.U = Your Own Universe - L.O.V.E = Linguistics of Visual English - L.O.V.E = Look Observe Verify Enjoy - L.O.V.E = Loss of Valuable Energy - M.E = Marriage Encounter - M.E = Mature Equivalent - M.E = Mental Endurance -M.E = Mental Excellence - D.O.N.T = Disturbing Opponents' No Trump! - YOU love ME - you LOVE me - you love ME - YOU LOVE ME - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me - you love me -you love me ...dont you? ...dont you? .....dont you?.....DONT YOU!?

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