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Old 06-23-2005, 08:33 AM   #1
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standing at the kitchen bench

standing at the kitchen bench

the evening light
simmers
a gentle lowering
into night
at the bench I peel potatoes
with a knife
sharpened myself
these many years
as my father did
all those years ago
the pumpkin, smiling
its ardent orange smile
is next and then an onion
side dishes to
the pie I’ve prepared
for our evening meal

but the footsteps of my son
do not clatter beneath my feet
and his voice no longer questions
with the same four year old intent
my daughter reads quietly
biting her bottom lip
just like her aunt my sister
once upon a time did

how quickly the years have fled
the babe’s once cradled in my arms
now run their own races
and evening meals
seem far more sedate
and at times like these
when the mind ponders
as the peas are pod and carrots washed
everything somehow sadder
without the shouting
of their little voices
that at the time
might almost have driven me to distraction
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Old 06-23-2005, 08:52 AM   #2
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Lovely piece. I think I would change the word "distraction". Other than that, I like it.
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Old 06-23-2005, 10:19 AM   #3
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so, do you guys down under call a 'kitchen counter' a 'kitchen bench'?... or is what you're describing what we'd call a 'chopping block'?
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Old 06-23-2005, 10:30 AM   #4
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You make it easy to visualize the "homey" kitchen setting in this. I like it. And I wouldn't change distraction.
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Old 06-23-2005, 06:40 PM   #5
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huh.

this actually brought tears to my eyes.

after what has been an incredibly hard day with a three year old and a seven year old, thank you for reminding me why i chose to do this in the first place...

quite a beautifully written and moving piece, dannyboy.

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Old 06-23-2005, 08:25 PM   #6
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thank you everyone, sometime Ms V we just need to shed
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