huni

Hard rain falling down
across graffitied walls
tells another tale

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journyman161

Nice haiku, but for me doesn't have that 'Aha!' moment of enlightenment that really makes haiku so good.

Hard rain implies (for me) acid rain rather than heavy rain. So I'm unsure whether the other tale is to do with pollution or with distorted graffiti.

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huni

Travelling into college in Melbourne each day (a new environment for this 'country lass') I was amazed to see the graffiti on the backs of factories and other properties. Some times it was quite beautiful, some times sinister. One day it was raining and (in a pun to the "tag" element of graffiti - it crossed my mind that with all we do to beautify or destroy, nothing can come close to natures effects on everything. Weather rain, sun or storm. For me it was an AHA! moment.

Okay, I'm rambling. As Danny would say now you got her started ...

Does that explain it though? huni.

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huni

p.s. I like the idea of rain distorting the fresh painted work though Mark. I wish I had thought of that. h.

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johnjohndoe

dear huni,

you must be spending some time in my neighborhood. there are some nice images going on here.

is it my imagination or do haikus not go over very well in this forum?

as always,

john. john doe.

journyman161

There was a pretty solid following over in Hungover Haiku & unholy haiku is rolling along nicely.

I think, compared to the other forms, it may not be as popular because of the discipline involved. (note sly dig at free-versers)

Also, it's difficult to get that 'AHA!' effect into such small space.

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*He has never been known to use a word that might send a reader to the dictionary - William Faulkner (about Ernest Hemingway)
*Poor Faulkner. Does he really think big emotions come from big words? - Ernest Hemingway (about William Faulkner)
*Thank you for sending me a copy of your book; I'll waste no time reading it - Moses Hadas
*He can compress the most words into the smallest idea of any man I know - Abraham Lincoln

huni

JJ, thanks for coming by. I enjoyed the images this one creates as well. I get a different response to them on the forums than at Lit. It's not that they don't go over so well, so much as we have had a lot of discussion, education and experimentation on Lit. than here. There are just so many good Haikuists there it does inspire one to go for it. And for the most part, on Lit., counting syllables and noting form has given way to the spirit of Haiku.

Mark you may be right as well. The discipline may put people off. I find the best way to write Haiku is buckle down to the discipline and then when I have that down pat go for it!!
For myself, I find free verse demands more of me than rhyming verse. Unless it's a Kyrielle or a Villanelle (which I still can't do properly -sob.) So Haiku gives me the work-out I need for free verse.

JJ, your comment has now inspired me to put on some Haiku without 5-7-5 (shock) I've been meaning to for awhile so here goes. How about you put some of your's here? warm regards huni.

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