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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 06-21-2005, 12:34 PM   #1
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Frustration

I’ve been at my desk all day just thinking,
scraps of my thoughts in scribbles, not linking.
My mind numbed, drained of ideas,
The word ‘Stop’ would be music to my ears.

Frustration creeps up my weary spine,
just sitting waiting for an inspiration, a sign.
Boredom weakens my once strong bones,
My whole body gives, my brain just moans.

I lift myself up, my head in my hands,
I stare at the page, I wish it blank, there it stands!
I try to scream, I won’t go on, but I must…
pen to the page, but this pen I don’t trust.

Scribbles again, I collapse on my desk, that’s it!
I’m going to bed, leaving this work to sit
Leaving the boredom, resting my head
Where I can soothe my bones and frustration is dead.

(Some poem i wrote ages ago but i think it is quite fun, it applies to quite alot of my life!)
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Old 06-24-2005, 07:41 AM   #2
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I know that feeling of frustration from time to time. This would be a nice piece with a little reworking. For instance 1st stanza rhyming "ideas" and "ears" is a bit of a stretch. Also The rhythm is way off, some lines the meter is much longer than others.
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Old 06-24-2005, 06:56 PM   #3
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