taintedvirtue

I was bored one day and wrote this with those magnet words things that people put on their fridge.

Vanilla Lady

Flags. Faces. Freedom.
The anguished silently searching
while the poet's writing simmers
into an echo.

The vanilla lady haunting the orchard
cries for battle
as the gray angel lingers
over the cauldron
ready to consume the foam
in a plead to heal the scars.

Both preparing for the
hallow fight of glory.

Eyes of recoiled ghosts
blossom into truthful thieves.
Who choke strewn rose stones
to create a furious movement.

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Five Jewish men influenced the history of Western civilization.

Moses said the law is everything.
Jesus said love is everything.
Marx said capital is everything.
Freud said sex is everything.
Einstein said everything is relative.

Druid

I like it.

You've captured a struggle with your comparison. The poet, though, does not always fight; so what you leave the reader with is an incomplete connection. Because the peice does not have a source to base the content, the ambiguity of the piece stumbles with the individual references of "the poet's" and "vanilla lady".
These are not mandatory, but I would read the poem easier knowing that they were integrated.

Keep writing.

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(Aetius 1.25.4=67B2)

journyman161

This is very pretty, but I have no idea what it's saying. I'm mainly left wondering what was on the fridge magnets. The 1st stanza is the only one that for me, provided any sense of common flow.

//Both preparing for the
hallow fight of glory.
Should this be 'hollow' fight of glory or 'hallowed'

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*He has never been known to use a word that might send a reader to the dictionary - William Faulkner (about Ernest Hemingway)
*Poor Faulkner. Does he really think big emotions come from big words? - Ernest Hemingway (about William Faulkner)
*Thank you for sending me a copy of your book; I'll waste no time reading it - Moses Hadas
*He can compress the most words into the smallest idea of any man I know - Abraham Lincoln