Abraxas

Red shades of emotion blush my cheeks
as your gentle voice fills my thoughts.
Twisting inside
I wonder.
My hair falls in my eyes
and you catch it.
Your eyes meet mine
searching and healing.
The sound of petals swimming around us
makes my heart fly.
I never would have known what happened next
until I opened my eyes again
and you kissed me.
Windy air breathes through your hair
as I let go and release.
Into your open arms I go
down deeper I am falling
in love with you.

journyman161

Nice work & reads well. Great imagery & detail to take the reader along. Really liked the idea of the sound of petals swimming - gonna go contemplate that for a while, I think. (grin)

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Nimbus

I liked it very much. I even detected internal rhyme. "Windy air breathes through your hair" also great imagery and stlye. I like the tone present and very good diction. It rflects things about you. Good job and keep it up!

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