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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
06-01-2005, 09:43 PM
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Messages on the Phone
Phone’s ringing again -
finding an excuse to leave it alone
Finish my beer as the message begins,
turn on the television so I don’t hear your voice.
Flicking from channel to channel
there’s no picture but your face; no sound
only your voice playing in my head
there’s no escape from that.
Getting beer number 12 of the night
I walk past the phone and check –
22 messages and counting…
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06-01-2005, 09:47 PM
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mwahaha I love it! Good man Rico, good poem.
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GOD HELP ME!
IT'S THE SOUND THAT MAKES ME PUNCH INFANTS! (but not ms. vodka's)
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06-01-2005, 09:51 PM
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Interesting, Rico-- some one just a little persistent?
Love the whole exasperated haunted tone. Smiles, petrel
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A man's subconscious self is not the ideal companion. It lurks for the greater part of his life in some dark den of its own, hidden away, and emerges only to taunt and deride and increase the misery of a miserable hour.
P. G. Wodehouse, Uneasy Money
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06-01-2005, 09:53 PM
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so it continues on Rico, great piece, good luck.
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06-01-2005, 10:07 PM
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thanks to all.
exasperation - perhaps a little...but there's definitely a little fear on my part too - I could answer the phone if I wanted...
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06-01-2005, 10:12 PM
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true--it's all still so fresh, isn't it?
hugs.
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A man's subconscious self is not the ideal companion. It lurks for the greater part of his life in some dark den of its own, hidden away, and emerges only to taunt and deride and increase the misery of a miserable hour.
P. G. Wodehouse, Uneasy Money
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06-01-2005, 10:14 PM
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yes, petrel, today is day 47. still very very fresh.
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06-01-2005, 10:14 PM
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dear Rico,
i liked the fact that there is a lot of beer drinking in your poem.
this poem is also passive-aggresive and i like that.
john. john doe.
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06-01-2005, 10:29 PM
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haha j. jd. Yes, lots of beer drinking in real life = lots of beer drinking in poem
thanks for reading.
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