LoneWolf

The complete definition of perfect
Stands on the corner,
Conversing with a friend,
Not knowing the
Perfection
That she holds

Rich, silky laugh
Flowing from a graceful,
Finely sculpted neck
As piercing, mysterious eyes
Glance upwards toward the heavens,
From where she most certainly must hail

Softly curved body,
Lovingly crafted by Mother Earth herself,
Slides flawlessly into a hideous
Yellow cab,
Yet her aura is the essence of
A star's cheerful smile

Who is this gorgeous woman,
She who fascinates even the
most resiliant,
Simply close your eyes,
dear audience,
And watch your answer appear--
None will be the same.


*Umm...I just wrote this because...I have no clue. I think there's a lesson in here somewhere?*

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Taz

Great work I couldnt find a single fault congratualtions. I'll read more of your stuff in the future as you bring your writing to life.
Taz

The End

This is a beautiful image you've created here, I think. The first verse reminds me vaguely of a concept found in the Tao Te Ching which suggests that perfection itself can only be attained by the unknowing. When perfection is processed by a human frame of reference it gets distorted, and the suggestion is that ultimately that's what accounts for diversity. Perfection is very possibly, by some standards, uniformity.

I remember when I used to have an image of a "perfect woman." Your poem has called my attention to the fact that that image is no longer with me, although I can certainly remember what it was like to have it.

While I'm having trouble identifying a lesson (maybe just because it's been such a long day), I found what you wrote to be soothing for me in a nostalgic sort of way. It was very easy to like.

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johnjohndoe

hello.

i liked your poem. i really did.

your poem could be about someone i know.

that's why i liked it so much.

john.

LoneWolf

Aww thanks all! I'm really happy that everyone liked my poem so much. I thought I'd be misunderstood. I tried really hard to get the descriptions just right...so that they'd form an image, but not a specific image. This poem is formed around my favorite saying, "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder".

Thanks again everyone!

LW

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My aim is to put down on paper what I see and what I feel in the best and simplest way. --Ernest Hemingway