Barr

CAUTION...contains some bad words...


"It all comes out in the wash"


If we're gonna go at it, let's not hold back,
it's time to clear the air.
Don't bite your tongue, don't sugar-coat your words.
It's not like you to be polite.
Don't think, just talk....or yell if you must,
let out a scream if it helps.
This has been coming for ten long years.
That's a long time to hold it all in.
Call me an asshole, a cheat, or liar if you must,
and I'll do the same for you.
"I hate you.", that's right, you heard what I said.
"Did that make it through your thick fucking skull?"
"To love you another day would be a waste of my time."
"How's that for clearing the air?"
You take my mistakes, and you won't let them go,
you throw them back into my face.
"How can I look to the future, when you keep me living in the past?"
You constantly keep dragging me down.
No one here is an angel, we both have our regrets.
The skeletons in our closets are real.
I forgave your mistakes, and put them in my past.
Why can't you just do the same?
"What doesn't kill you, only makes you stronger", how's that for cliche?
It's to bad you forgot how to listen.

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crzywriter

Just popping in for a moment and I found your poem, Barr. there's a few spelling and grammar typos, but I won't go into them.

This seems so different from the last poem of yours that I read. There were a lot of really strong emotions here. Seemed like writing this was an emotional catharsis (or am I wrong ).
All in all, good job.

LoneWolf

Wow.

It was very very good... I could feel the intensity of your emotions but you kept the poem so neat and short. It was great. It was a lot different from the last one, though...

...but it was wonderful. It actually made me kind of mad just reading it, which is strange for me to do lol. Hopefully I shall see you 'round again!

L. Wolf

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Barr

Hey,

thanks guys....yes, it is a little different then my last one. Funny thing is, this is not wrote on any experience, I just sat down one night and the words started coming.

Glad you enjoyed it..

Barr

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Wyndstar

If I didn't like this so much, I'd say it was a cleverly veiled rant---but therein lies its success in getting me to read it; it gains power from its certain amount of rythme, and coiling elegance in its raw vulgarity.

Barr

Is it a rant?....we will never know...haha...

Thanks for the thumbs up!!

Barr

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crzywriter

hey there again!

like this better.

one more thing I noticed on this read-through:

should be that's, I believe.

Barr

all fixed

thanks for the tips..

Barr

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nae411

Good job Barr, interesting rant/poem. Enjoyed it and agree with it!

Nae

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Barr

I know it's a month later, but thanks Nae!!

Barr

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