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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
03-24-2005, 10:13 PM
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Join Date: Jan 2005
Location: Italy
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Abject and Heartfelt Apology
This poem is dedicated to the person on this site whom I have hurt over the past few days. You know who you are.
Things I've said
...thoughtless words
Things I've done
...like I didn't care
Please understand
I've not been myself.
Bad weeks made
bad people out of the
best of us
(and I am far from the best)
But I don't want it to end
like this.
You were right
I'm in the wrong
I bit the hand that tried
to help, used the man
who wanted to be a friend.
I wish you could see me
because the tears in my eyes,
my bloodshot
sleepless eyes
would tell you
that I'm not lying.
Deceit's what shows
blackness in our hearts,
my black has come out to play.
Please give me the chance
to show you the white.
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03-24-2005, 10:23 PM
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Location: Utah
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I like it, but I don't know if you want it to be crituqed, just viewed by someone. This would be a good apology to me. It shouldn't be changed, it is how it is supposed to be.
Tyson
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03-24-2005, 10:24 PM
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Thank you, Tyson. I do want the man I've hurt to view it, but any critique before he sees it can't possibly hurt.
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03-24-2005, 10:25 PM
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True, but I have none, I wouldn't want to give any either just because it is how it is meant to be.
Tyson
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03-24-2005, 10:30 PM
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Okay, Tyson. Thank you for reading this.
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03-24-2005, 10:31 PM
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No problem it was my pleasure.
Tyson
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03-25-2005, 01:24 AM
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tweaked it again.
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