crzywriter

Although the blood spills
from your heart to the ground.
Although the life fades
from your eyes to the skies.
Although the smile dies
from your lips as you fall.

Even though I hold the knife
watch the blood drip to the ground.
Even though I hold the gun
watch the bullets pierce your skin
Even though I hold the pills
watch the breath choked from your throat.

Despite this, my heart is yours
since we first met, since we first kissed.
Despite this, my life is yours
since you said that you’d be mine.
Despite this, my soul is yours
since we said we’d end all this.

Eiji Tunsinagi

I like the form (AfAfAf EwEwEw DsDsDs); unique, at least to me. I like the rhyme :

'Although the life fades
from your eyes to the skies.'

'Despite this, my heart is yours
since we first met, since we first kissed.'

'Despite this, my soul is yours
since we said we’d end all this.'

I liked these lines the most in particular. Good stuff.

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"how will you go about finding that thing the nature of which is totally unknown to you?"

riadohaed

i liked it... i dont think its anything spectaculrly original.. and i cant spell. but eh not bad there

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"there is no light in the darkness of your furtherst reaches sink your teeth into the flesh of midnight... " - The Mars Volta

bits of my thoughts glued onto computer paper and taped onto your monitor.

crzywriter

thanks for reading. and i'll forgive your spelling riadohead.

~Crzy