ms. vodka

The legendary arrogance of you
made you think you saw the truth.
I lied, you lied, and that’s what we do.
Only caused a fracture, a cracked rib,
or, god forbid, a chipped tooth.
But perhaps, hidden deep beneath the house,
in the damp of the clammy crawlspace,
a child’s doll of truth sits forlorn and unused?
It’s purpose forgotten unwittingly.
Maybe I won’t look everyone in the eyes today after all.
Won’t be quite as proud as I could have been.
What ifs hang some days like coastal fog.
Like all fickle weather, some days are clear.
Reality seems more important now.
Where you are, where you were, who you’re with
doesn’t seem to matter like it did before.
Thoughts of you, no longer majestic,
now only pompous, a pebble in my shoe.
I refuse to change who I am for you.
Although admittedly, tonight I drink to forget
what I thought you might have been.
Disappointed in the truth that is
the legendary arrogance of you.

MariusBonaparte

Ms. Vodka, your poems are absolutely intoxicating. I really like the structure of this one. It flowed nicely and you have an exceptional ability to conjure up interesting images in my mind.

Good work. I look forward to reading more of you.

ms. vodka

Please excuse my candor, Marius, but well, your name is hot.

gordon

The power and sadness in this poem compel the reader
One of the best poems I have read here for a long time
This is poetry in its finest form
I felt the pain in every line and the sadness of realization in the end
Excellent
G

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Eiji Tunsinagi

Each line was skillfully crafted to it's most capable effect. I liked this one quite a lot.

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kerpoe

It was definately strong, I didn't actually like the structure, but for the content it was appropriate I suppose.

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Londongrey

Yay Ms. Vodka!!!!

It's good to see your writing up and out there again. And again your imagery is superb.

Thank you for sharing this piece.

Alex xx

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ms. vodka

thank you all very much for your comments.

i just hope it reached the one it was passively agressively intended to hurt.

evil laugh...

vod

lemming pie

ms. vodka, it's not often that I read another's lines and think Damn, I wish I'd written that!, but I did with this one. Just wonderful.

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ms. vodka

lemming, that is a huge compliment. thank you very much.

nae411

Miss V, Where in the world have I been???

Your words penetrate deeply into my mind, I totally get this, feel it, love it, well should I continue???

Incredible work!

Nae

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