Inseparable Lovers - Writers Forum

nae411 · 02-16-2005, 10:43 PM

Blindfolded,
hands bound,
I led you
into my mind and
surrendered my thoughts to you.

Fragments of who
I have become
are unrecognizable to most
but not to you,
I can’t fool you,
don’t want to.
You know the real me.

You laughed with me and
we became children.
We cried and became
inseparable lovers.
Without sight,
without fear,
I led you into my mind and
you led me into a world unknown to most…

One that is solely ours,
And if I forget to say this later,
Thank you.

Philo · 02-16-2005, 10:51 PM

Sweet and very personal Nae. I feel like I'm walking in on something not meant for me to see.

This poem has a quietness and softness so it, like its being whispered.

I hope you had a nice St. Valentine's Day (looks like you may have indeed)

kerpoe · 02-16-2005, 10:55 PM

Very sweet Nae...

Tyson · 02-16-2005, 10:57 PM

Yes all the above is true and it is very personal sounding, and I like the way it flows. It isn't like the normal way to flow it feels different.
Tyson

nae411 · 02-16-2005, 11:10 PM

Hi there Philo, thank you for your comment. I guess I think that is what it is supposed to feel like. Sometimes walking in on people's thoughts is a good thing.

Kerpoe, Thank you so much.

Tyson, Flows different? I hope that is a good thing. Thank you!

Nae

Tyson · 02-17-2005, 10:05 AM

It is a good thing the way you did it I mean, it is hard for me to explain and I can't right now so I will think about it and then tell you later if I can.
Tyson

nae411 · 02-17-2005, 11:46 AM

Thanks Tyson.

nae411 · 02-17-2005, 02:45 PM

Gigi thank you. You read my mind, it is crowded in there.

I really appreciate your review. You comment as good as you write. That is a very good thing.

Thanks,
Nae