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Old 02-15-2005, 07:48 PM   #1
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The Homestretch

I know it's confusing and pretentious jargon but I'm going to throw it out there anyways

MAke our children from pills of plastic
1 pill 1 child of machinery, 1 splintered cell of our restless ilk
don’t take 1 or 2 make sure you take 2.5
mold you child to the auto-Adonis, a wilted rose growing
not in your arms
but the manifold of machinery fingers

Settle down…What for America?
Fleur-de-lis of rubber remnant let flow
Along the threadbare of your asphalt Lethe
And hop into my car or let die
Your sea, your vista
The imago of you

I don’t see the America
We gave birth to
I see your mask of ivory
No fruit of loins
Crisp like phalluses of old
Winded like the dynasty of Rome
I see four 50’s and a new century…dead

4 jackasses 1 Bush and a myriad of elephants in leotards of rouge
Naked strata growing and not wilting
Like the flower it has killed
A Kerouac not mad
A martyr missing
A world trampled and looking for a fix

plaster print of ‘pretty’
On all the faces of the ugly
That were as beautiful as soul
And now as plastic as your mind
So hop into my car and ride into the night
Madness won’t find us in the river
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Old 02-16-2005, 09:52 AM   #2
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sorry, but just plain 'confused' to me... you seem to have something worth saying and i'd like to see it in a form that the reader can make some sense of...

as is, it reads like the writer took many more than the recommended dosage... but maybe that's your intent?
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Old 02-16-2005, 06:21 PM   #3
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That was my intent (as weird as it may seem). I am trying to express a sense of confusion in a totally unorthodox manner, yet most of my writing is 'intentionally' confusing. Thanks for the feedback and I'll put it into a more reader friendly format...
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