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02-15-2005, 08:51 AM
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Best Seller
Join Date: Jun 2004
Location: ohio
Gender: Female
Posts: 600
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Mother
You're screaming negativity into my ears,
creating many new and horrible fears,
the words from a mother are supposed to help you through,
not leave you bleeding and trying to cover your own wounds
Making sure I brush my hair,
sitting with my shoulders against my chair,
hoping my good posture will catch your eye,
instead you scream at my shoes for not being tied
I try to live the way you wish
but all you notice is where I miss,
where I fall short and where I lack,
lack the things you wish I had
I suppose for now I’ll bandage my wounds
hoping that nothing bleeds through,
and pray for hurtful words will fade away,
pray to God for just one good day.
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02-15-2005, 11:31 AM
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Prolific Writer
Join Date: Jan 2005
Location: In Another Land
Posts: 199
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Re: Mother
I tidied up the spelling and grammar, hope you don't mind. I've tried to leave the structure intact, as that is a matter for the writer and not me.
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Originally Posted by Shy_Love
You're screaming negativity into my ears,
creating many new and horrible fears,
the words from a mother are supposed to help you through,
not leave you bleeding and trying to cover your own wounds
Making sure I brush my hair,
sitting with my shoulders against my chair,
hoping my good posture will catch your eye,
instead you scream at my shoes for not being tied
I try to live the way you wish
but all you notice is where I miss,
where I fall short and where I lack,
lack the things you wish I had
I suppose for now I’ll bandage my wounds
hoping that nothing bleeds through,
and pray for hurtful words will fade away,
pray to God for just one good day
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02-15-2005, 12:25 PM
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Join Date: Jun 2004
Location: ohio
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Oo!! Thank you!!! ::has poor grammar and spelling::
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02-16-2005, 12:08 AM
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Join Date: Feb 2005
Location: New Mexico
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I found this VERY moving. As the dad of a four-year-old, I have to constantly watch out for stuff like this - you hope you're saying the right things, but it's so easy to forget to imagine yourself on the receiving end, how it adds up... A lovely (heartbreaking) reminder like this is a huge gift, and takes courage to share. Thank you.
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02-16-2005, 04:35 PM
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Location: ohio
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Wow, I've never really had anyone like my writing enough to just say purely nice stuff about it.
You sound like a nice person and a good dad (better then mine anyway). Good luck with the 4 year old. I take care of one year old triplets over night and durning the day...I know kids are a lot of work. ^_^
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