the phoenix

Misunderstanding

Illusions I can see,
No-thing I can feel.
Experience to me,
Is neither false nor real.
What is there to topple in a society of lies?

Tyson

I like the way that you used Nothing, it has two meanings which is intresting, this is not something that we would misunderstand.
Tyson

European_Son

This felt unfinished, as it didn't really say anything to me which stuck in my mind and it didn't really go anywhere. To get away with short poetry, in my opinion, the impact of every line, every word almost, has got to be maximized. Each word has got to be like a literary punch, BANG - BANG - BANG, or it comes across as unfinished and/or empty.

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