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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 02-07-2005, 01:33 PM   #1
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The Lost City

Who has awaken me, and what does thou wish to know
The path of the nightly orbs, where does the water flow?
Tis true, young sir, I know all, yet I tell less.
Stare in amazement, for in front of thou is the great, oracle Tess.
Now ask and listen, for I won't repeat it again.
Ask and you may receive the knowledge of all men.
Now let me look into thy eyes, for tis the window to the soul.
Without that one essential, a person cannot be whole...

The question is important, thy eyes tell all.
Thou wishes to know when we shall fall.
Thy question is asked, and now I shall talk.
Soon will leave the ground on which you walk.
The seas will rise and cover the city.
Such a wonderful place, forsooth a pity.
Run if thou wishes, but it will not help thee,
For now here comes the waves of the sea.
There's not much hope, thy loved ones are lost.
I can tell thee a way out, but at a great cost
But what's left to lose...the city of Atlantis is lost.
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Old 02-07-2005, 06:48 PM   #2
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Hey DJ,

I like the way you have set this poem into a story. I am looking forward to continued reading. The only thing that throws me off a bit is the thee's and thy. But I must admit it does make the piece feel more timely.

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