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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 01-31-2005, 03:20 PM   #1
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First Time

Quiet spot, all alone
Stars shine down, just like a home.
Take my hand, hold me tight
Hug me close with all your might.

Lay me down, caress my hair
Deep into my eyes you stare.
Gentle touch, deep kiss
Reminding me of what I miss.

Off goes the sweater, tugging at the belt
Wanting me to feel, just how you felt.
Push your hand away, rougher touch
You've heard the word 'no' way too much.

Won't listen to me, won't even plead or beg
Try to push you off as you lay against my leg.
Don't change my mind, don't change yours
Forcing me to continue as the tears begin to pour.

Not caring that I say what you're doing is wrong
You say I've had this coming, teasing you for so long.
You have me pinned, it's like I’m bound
My clothes are in a pile on the ground.

You continue with your deed
Acting as though I'm all you need.
It's against the law, it's against my will
No matter what, you continue still.

I try to think of other things, all the reasons I once knew
But my mind snaps back to reality, my mind snaps back to you.
Please make it end, please make him stop
My mind is confused, spinning like a top.

I can't believe I listened, trusted you with all my heart.
You told me you loved me, you played the part.
If I had only listened to what my friends had said
Then I wouldn't be here, in my time of need and dread.

The pressure was removed, the force taken away
You sit up and I lie still, with my feeling of dismay.
I grab my clothes and get dressed, not looking in your eyes.
I feel dirty and unwanted, an unlawful surprise.

You take my hand, you hold me tight
You try and make everything alright.
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Old 01-31-2005, 11:11 PM   #2
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Fataldelivery, I read this earlier and wasn't able to comment. This poem is so hurtful to read. It must have been very hard to write. You did a pretty good job considering you used rhyme and were able to stay on topic.

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Old 02-01-2005, 12:19 PM   #3
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That was to the heart of the matter, but very heart breaking. Good writing
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Old 02-01-2005, 12:36 PM   #4
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excellent

Hello, I feel bad for reading it. But it was very good. Sorry you had to write it but hopefully you feel better getting it off your chest.
good job
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