vulgerlove

forgive me please
for leaving
you
FACE DOWN
in your own puke
AROMATIZED
in your own drunkness

forgive me please
for caring enough
to pick up your mess
as you lied to me
TRUST
lost in your misery

forgive me please
for not subjecting myself
to your excues
your pleas
your rationilazations
your promises

YOUR PROMISES ARE LIES

forgive me please
for given you a chance after
your LAST CHANCE
do my words mean nothing

forgive me please
for making you a promise
that forever we would stay
FORGIVE ME
I don't want to see you
SLOWLY KILL YOURESELF
as that is your INTENTION

forgive me please
for not wanting to be in your fantasy
there to revolve around you
neglectful of my own individual needs

FORGIVE ME
i am not your mother
I will not pick up your messes

Forgive me please
for breaking your heart
and having you blame me
for your drinking reprise.

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kryar

vulgerlove,

Heart breaking poem. I would say that poetry such as this is the hardest to comment on because it is straight from the heart. So I won't do a line by line or go into detail. The most obvious error I see is the typo in stanza 3, line 3 which should be "excuses." Good Poem!

santiago

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Yo quiero más que Taco Bell...

AtroposDay

I liked the message here, and it reminds me of what happened to a good friend of mine... But the caps were a bit... distracting. Perhaps you could replace them with italics? Shows promise, though.

Dayan

vulgerlove

Thank you. I will revise.

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ms. vodka

Unless this is meant as spoken work, remove the all caps. Let your work speak for itself, don't force the thoughts you find important...

The strength of your work should lie in the words themselves, not how they look, imo.