Londongrey

I gave you a satin sheen,
the sheet you pull over
is my back, shining with
each movement in time.
The air as humid as our
single encounter, the
only sign clenched fists,
open mouths and the
graceful arch in our
necks.

Ballet is played with our
toes, perfect point and
pirouette with lifts to
make a teacher jealous.
Muscles tighten as the sun
rises in the valley, an
offering of blindness as
it's heat bursts over us.
The cotton goes clear
as morning dew springs.

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Philo

Londongrey, you've been reading Nae and Gigi poems! Is there something in the water around here?

There's a lot going on in this poem. The imagery is powerfully done. There are somethings I don't understand, but thats typical for me. The vagueness in poetry can set a mood.

One thing though: is there another word for 'teacher' that might be specific to ballet (assuming that was the reference) 'teacher' sounds a bit school marm to me.

Nicely done.

nae411

Alex, this forum is getting hot, ooo, I like it!!!!
Great write.

Nae

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Rkay

sweltering!
and although I do not actually write or read the sub-genré
has got me hot under the collar....
Alex you know your stuff....
the ballet references - mmm..... that gave it a zing

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peterpaulino

I like the referrence to ballet where here it's been danced not vertically but horizontally LOL!

Let's see if this beats the stickyness of my 'sticky' poems (or nae's), I know it would!

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ms. vodka

the
only sign clenched fists,
open mouths and the
graceful arch in our
necks.


londongrey, this is very hot, but not cheap. very nice job of writing what you wanted to write while still keeping your voice.

Ms. V

Lilia

nice. real nice. erotica at its most refined.

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Londongrey

Thanks guys!

I think you know who this is for right? Hehe

Alex xxx

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alphadog

LG:
That was a great read... Loved the imagery... nice and sensuous.

Very strong.

Great job!

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Londongrey

Thanks alphadog!!

I enjoyed thinking about the inspiration behind it (no pun intended)

Alex

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nae411

OH you are back and as naughty as ever! Good.

Nae

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Londongrey

Lol, well it is valentines!!

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nae411

So what is your excuse for the rest of the year? I ran out of excuses.

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lisajane

I think the ballet name for teacher might be Madame.

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