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Old 01-21-2005, 04:41 AM   #1
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The Leaving

Alone I sit in my chair,
Without any type of care,
but in my heart I do fear.
And I feel the sadness of a tear.
I'll leave soon and am no more.

A lonely feeling drips down my face,
And leaves a scar of disgrace,
It's power so longing and so deep.
I listen to its sound as it creeps.
I'll leave soon and am no more.

The haunting sound while I sleep.
It bores me closer to my feet,
So very close to my door.
I leave you and it is no more.
I'll leave you soon and am no more.
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Old 01-21-2005, 08:44 AM   #2
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First off - it's spelled leaving. Seeing that twice prompted me to leave this comment so it's not all bad. I found the poem a bit simplistic and while the message was crystal clear it wasn't all that poetic even though it rhymed.
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