Scratches

through foreboding doors
a dangerous brush with life
waits - holding flowers

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Holls

Ooooooooooooo! How lovely!
Absolutely striking image - very wraithy and ethereal.
Especially love the image of holding flowers - wonderful job!

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WordBeast

Hmmm...profound. I like it, Scratches.

WB :>

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Scratches

Thanks Holls and WordBeast! It was spur of the moment.

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Never get so attached to a poem
you forget truth that lacks lyricism
and never draw so close to the heat
that you forget that you must eat
- En Gallop, Joanna Newsom

Rkay

What struck me most here is the use of foreboding and dangerous "alongside" flowers! Contrasting images/feelings that provoked a vision of a tightrope walker (that's me on the off-tangent again) who at the other end receives an abundance of accolade and adrenalin rush like no other and yet may have in the course of his feat come to tragedy.....

Beautiful! Thanks for posting this poem.

Ricky

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Ilan Bouchard

Lots of imagery. Contrast, and the "brush with life" reminded me of a painting of a flower, while at the same it knowing it certainly wasn't. So many combinations of interpretation, wonderful.

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Scratches

Thankyou Ilan and Rkay. It's great to know your thoughts (the more tangential the better).

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Never get so attached to a poem
you forget truth that lacks lyricism
and never draw so close to the heat
that you forget that you must eat
- En Gallop, Joanna Newsom

Penelope

I enjoyed this contrast of emotions. A tension with a surprise ending. haiku wise, it's a senryu due to having a human level to it. I noticed you omitted capital letters which is correct but also noticed a comma. Punctuation in this poetry style is limited to a dash - here and there and sometimes a capital letter if a month or some other item requiring it is used. Therefore if you replace the comma with a dash it will be senryu accurate. All of my haiku/senryu lessons have been very recently learned and I'm still working my way through all of the different interpretations. I add this disclaimer to make sure you don't think I'm an expert or anything.

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Scratches

Duly noted and promptly changed, Penelope. Thankyou for your wisdom! I feel bad now, having told someone I know that "a haiku doesn't have to be about nature... I don't think it does anyway..."

But that's probably about the third haiku I've ever written, so I think it's forgivable!

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Never get so attached to a poem
you forget truth that lacks lyricism
and never draw so close to the heat
that you forget that you must eat
- En Gallop, Joanna Newsom