tomcat

Just a short little dark piece

enjoy:

Life on the Edge



Clean and simple lines
Formed for comfort
In its shining speculate
Tainted with tears and sadness

Burnished silver
Reflection of pain
A sparkle glimmers on the edge
Of the thin line between two worlds

Clean and efficient
Utility of enhancing beauty
Living on the edge of straight razor,
Or not

C. Thomas 2004

Rkay

ooh that was a 'painful' read!
excellent word-work there,
had you not mentioned 'straight razor'
I would have got it anyways....

strange how
"Burnished silver
Reflection of pain
A sparkle glimmers on the edge
Of the thin line between two worlds"
did it for me.... in fact that last line of this stanza
gave it a fulcrum on which I picked up the weight of the poem!

Will read you again.

Ricky

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tomcat

Whew, your first line kind of got me, thougt i was going to get a negative review, but im glad it turned out well and you enjoyed the poem...as far as my other reads, feel free to do a search on me. I write on a HUGE range of subjects, would be interested to hear your thoughts.

peace
Chris.

Rkay

No worries Chris! You scratch my back, I scratch yours!
But not with razors this time around, okay.

By the way, I never give negative reviews. I may pick on typos and such, but they would be the mechanics of the writing craft. I lay my sights on the dynamics of literature.

I would be most interested to hear your thoughts too....

Ricky

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tomcat

Ty, i have just begun to seek your work, I have commented on one, and will do so on more shortly

ty for the postivie comments and your instight into my poem.

Chris.