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Old 12-09-2004, 12:28 PM   #1
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Thanks to a muse
I wrote this for an English teacher who I particularly enjoyed, harsh criticism is welcome as I’m planning to give it to her and I don't want to look like too much of a fool
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Just sit back, relax, I’m not here out of spite
I’ve got facts to relate, I’ve a smile to ignite
Though I bleed raw red ink
And bruise under true words
Don’t think for a moment
I’ll regret what I’ve heard

Thanks

For joy hurt and confusion
For the work you require

Fuel to my delusions
Simple ways you inspire

This is only your job
But only only to you
I know a small mob
Who’d explain why that’s true
So thanks and goodbye, I’ll ask please excuse
A boy’s simple smiles, he’s in awe of a muse.
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Old 12-09-2004, 12:31 PM   #2
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Thats fucking rad dude!! It expresses so well and honestly what a lot of people may feel for their muse. I wish I could say goodby to mine. Excellent, I love it.
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Old 12-09-2004, 12:34 PM   #3
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! wow thanks judysaidso I may not feel so stupid giving the poem to her now
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Old 12-09-2004, 12:35 PM   #4
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Is she your muse? That takes guts man. I could never do it. It would probably shatter me if she didnt like it. Good luck dude.
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Old 12-09-2004, 12:38 PM   #5
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lol yah - I'm proboably going to faint shortly after handing it to her.

teacher: oh whats this?
me: urgg
teacher: ?
me: *passes out*
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Old 12-09-2004, 12:43 PM   #6
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AND its your teacher. Good for you man!
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Old 12-09-2004, 01:17 PM   #7
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hey, kids!... i'm a 66 yr old mom/grandma/mentor and sometime muse... and if i got this from one of my kids/students, i'd flip my fleepin' wig [or whatever you guys say these days]!

great workmithouse!... some teacher's gonna go out and buy a frame on her first break... and show this off like a phd certificate...

love and respectful hugs, maia
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