Krissy04

The eyes are the one place,
your feelings cannot hide.
To your true colors,
they will forever be the guide.
The eyes show the things,
that you don't want to.
They will always show,
the real you.
The eyes are the windows,
to your soul.
They tell your story,
in its whole.

thamior

umm hmm, well your rhymes kinda strectxh between good and just a bit bad, I like the overall theme but there isnt any emotion. its also really short as well, hmm I would like if you could expand, if you cant think of any changes to the rhymes keep them but try to see if you could more feeling into it,i dont know if its hard to put feeling into a poem about feeling but it defiently lacks there.

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nae411

Krissy, I like your poem. I do believe the eyes can't lie, although sometimes I wish the could. Much enjoyed!

Nae

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