Scorpio Enigma

Rainstorm Mentality

Feel the soft rain pour down in a shower,
the crystal clear liquid is soothing.
And look to the clouds, a beautiful hour
where flowers are seen to be blooming.

Wade into the dancing light in streaks across the sky.
Wade into the shallow pools and liquefy what binds.

The crystal clear liquid is soothing
as silver pools reflect the drowned.
Where flowers are seen to be blooming,
grasping the dew drops, all to be found.

Wade until the stars appear and glisten like your eyes.
Wade until your dreams are real, the clearest to the blind.

As silver pools reflect the drowned,
behold the basis of our verve.
Grasping the dew drops, all to be found
convene just to sense and observe.

Wade into the myth you seek, the need will often die.
Wade until you are whole- body, soul, and mind.

Behold the basis of our verve,
and look to the clouds, a beautiful hour.
Convene just to sense and observe,
and feel the soft rain pour down in a shower.

Wade into the dancing light in streaks across the sky,
Wade until your dreams are real, the clearest to the blind.
Wade into the myth you seek, the need will often die,
Wade into the shallow pools and liquefy what binds.
Wade until the stars appear and glisten like you eyes,
Wade until you are whole- body, soul, and mind.

10-07-03

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Our mind is a piece of paper, and our experiance is our pen. We begin to write at birth, and we publish when we die - me.

HAVE A NICE DAY! - Scorpio

Kat

The pattern is interesting. I found the italics a little too distracting though. Makes you want to skip around and read them seperate.

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I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night. -Sarah Williams

Scorpio Enigma

Hey Kat, thanks for replying. The italics have been with this poem forever and they are meant to seperate. They are to indicate that it is not just a straight read, like softer lines. I had one member describe the effect as being as if someone was whispering those lines in the background. I appreciate your reply but I think i'm going to keep them.

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Our mind is a piece of paper, and our experiance is our pen. We begin to write at birth, and we publish when we die - me.

HAVE A NICE DAY! - Scorpio

petrel}

I really enjoyed your poem, mainly because I love rain. Your imagery is wonderful.

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A man's subconscious self is not the ideal companion. It lurks for the greater part of his life in some dark den of its own, hidden away, and emerges only to taunt and deride and increase the misery of a miserable hour.

P. G. Wodehouse, Uneasy Money

scorpio

I really enjoyed this poem, too bad other writers don't spend enough time assembling their work. It's also good to see you have decided not to leave, that would be a shame. Don't let other people get to you, the intelligence in your writing percieves your above that nonsense.
Looking forward to seeing more of your work from Scorpio.

Mikan_J_C

Just... simply... brilliant. I honestly would love to say more but this has taken my breath away

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FollowingShadow

Grrr. The lack of meter ruined what otherwise is a resolutely descriptive poem. It's nice, but it could be better with some definite cadence. That or free verse, take your pick.