aliceedelweiss

I'm not very good at poetry, but I felt like seeing what people on here think of this. I realize the stanzas aren't even and stuff, I wrote it then I chopped them up to how I thought it would fit. Just tell me what you think, bad, good, what ever, anything works.

Massage my emotions
Free my words to your ears
I hate screaming at you,
But when I am angry you don’t mind

Worried, always, ‘bout the way you are living
Thinking, everyday, about the things you would say
Your face is a mystery, but your love is always shown

How can I repay you, for the things you have done
You soften my mind with your gentle words
No way to repay you, no way to show you my love.

I guess I’ll just stick to words;
It’s all I ever have to work with
My love for you is hard to place.
Strong, true, and anything but a dream
Anything and everything you do
Is perfect the way I see

I could just tell you how I feel
With my words, I love you
But it would never truly state, how I feel inside
Warm, calm, with you by me

Can’t I just say the words to tell you?
They’ll never come to my mind
You know I love you, I know I do too
But it isn’t enough, to just tell you

You have to know, to understand, to feel
That the total truth is, I could never love anyone
Anyone...

Other then you...

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Pawn

I quite liked this. While I remember, the penultimate word should be 'than'. The ending is a bit clichéd, but the work in general feels frank and sincere. Genuine feeling always comes through. This is by no means amazing - but not a bad read at any stretch of the imagination.

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