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Old 08-04-2004, 01:14 PM   #1
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Lord Will

Lord Will

By Carl . L . Yang

I wake up again.
I've screamed.
It's a nightmare.
tears are still on my face.
I've lost.......
Were am I from?
What am I doing here?
Where am I going?
I wonder.....
Thanks for your wisdom.
Thanks for your blessing.
Thanks for your guide.
Now I get it, My Lord!
I know Who is the world number one.
But I hate God why you always makes me alone.

Copyrighted by Carl . L . Yang
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Old 08-04-2004, 11:38 PM   #2
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In the last two sentences ae worded strangly. Maybe

I know who in this worls is number one
But I hate God, why do you always leave me so alone


Just a thought.
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Old 08-06-2004, 02:29 PM   #3
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In the last two sentences ae worded strangly. Maybe

I know who in this worls is number one
But I hate God, why do you always leave me so alone


Just a thought.
I know Who is the world number one.
But I hate God, why do you always make me alone.
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i think you have got what i mean here. in fact i'm very modest, i just show the feeling of being the world number 1. i really aprreciate your talent. thanks again.
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