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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
08-01-2004, 03:43 PM
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Scribe
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Location: Gulf Of Mexico
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Battle ABCDerian
Inspired by Penelope's Berzerker:
Aligned along the ridge they wait,
Battle hardened they choose their fate,
Cadence chant among the hoard,
Drumbeats rattle as they draw sword.
Echo across the valley shouts
Forward marching foot and mount
Gathering speed for the charge
Hurtling down the gentle sward
Impending death has crows in flight
Javelins thrown a fearful sight
Kiss, their victims howl in pain
Left to die their cries in vain
Momentous roar as armies meet
No given quarter upon defeat
Over bodies countless tread
Putrid vapors from the dead
Questing steel finds hearts to rend
Raging foe to hell, they send
Sanguine mist as axe blades cleave
Terror stricken the fallen greave
Upon their steeds the leaders battle
Victory shout above death rattle
Warriors begin the final route
Xanthic light cast all about
Yester life in stillness lie
Zenith sun begins to die.
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08-01-2004, 03:51 PM
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Hey Nauticus
Hey Nauticus great job!!!! See you got into the madness too. I think I am going to delete mine, everyone's has been so good, I posted mine as a joke now I feel silly. 
Nae
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08-01-2004, 03:54 PM
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Scribe
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No No nae I love yours... sultry ummm what did huni say? minx? lol dont delete and thatnks for the comment :O)
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08-01-2004, 03:58 PM
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reply/Nauticuss
Well It can just be considered my blooper. Great job on yours and I really loved your poem you posted at Lit, sorry can't remember the name right now, and for obvious reasons, I can't look it up.
Nae
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Years of practice only to find, practice is for amateurs. Live life without a script...
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08-01-2004, 04:03 PM
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nauticus66, your piece is excellent =D>
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08-01-2004, 04:09 PM
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Thank you Nae, The piece was Hollow and sad to say lit.org was down before I could see your comment... but thank you all the same... I'm sure I'll see it toon. Martin thank you I'm glad u liked it :O).
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08-01-2004, 04:10 PM
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toon??? umm... soon lol correct my spelling! lol
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08-01-2004, 11:19 PM
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Anothery
Fantastic. I'm enjoying having everyone give this a go. This was exceptional Nauticus. What wonderful words you chose! Love the image of the bloody battle happening on the gentle green slopes of grass. Sobering, one I think. regards huni
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08-02-2004, 01:13 AM
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FABULOUS!
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08-02-2004, 12:09 PM
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Thank you Huni for your wonderful comments and I must say I do enjoy the banter between you and Nae. Penelope thank you for the inspiration and wonderful example you give us all to strive for.
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08-05-2004, 01:37 PM
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Hey nauticus, I'd like to feature this poem at the site where I moderate poetry styles, let me know if that would be okay.
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08-05-2004, 03:43 PM
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Penelope,
Your welcome to use my poem any time :O), thanks for the interest... I am honored.
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08-05-2004, 03:56 PM
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