anon

Tremble, quiver, rattle, quake -
Our bones be dust before we wake!
A path of blood and skin so pale
A soldier's cry, a mother's wail
Cast out among the din of lies
Purported before our scarlet skies,
Politicians, leaders, "moral" men,
All send us to die for them!
War set forth in dust and mire
To be justified by God's sweet choir
According to one who's voice rings dull
Fight for me and crush their skulls,
God is with us, everyone
We are his children; none of them!

A young man falls for another's glory
His face collapsed in, his belly crimsoned and gory-
His pockets lined with dollar bills,
Candy bars and sleeping pills-
Pills for him to sleep the night-
through bullet's screech and explosion's fright.
Skin now pale, and frought with dust
Hair wirey and thin, and lined with crust.
Lies dissipate in the wake of death-
He died for us, for patriotism, for myth.
I love this man, for he is me
He lived his life and lived it free

I will fight when I am called,
I will die when it's my time to fall
When bullets rip through my dirty flesh,
I will have died for you, and you are blessed,
Because I died for God, I died for country-
I died for all that is good and holy -
Since War is a game and nothing more
To be waged at will, by any old whore,
By farmers, and clerks, by politicians, by men
With goals to set and glory to win!
Since I am young, vital, and fresh-
It is my flesh that will rip the best.

When next you hear war's drums and speak,
"Perhaps I'll go and fight this week,"
Remember this, your heart will ache,
Your body will tremble, quiver, rattle, and quake.

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Cora Windover

pretty cool... it pictures war in two faces, the gory and the godly...

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Alexander

"
Politicians, leaders, "moral" men,
All send us to die for them!
"

That second line seems a bit short. Maybe, "All send us forth to die for them!" I know you use forth in the next line, but I was just using an example. Change it if you feel it should be so.

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ink stained dreamer

I agree with Alexander, that line is a bit too short. It almost interrupts the flow. But other then that, a great piece of work!

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Alexander

Now that I've thought about it, if you start it unstressed, it fits. But you've got to already know that, or figure it out. It'd be a lot easier and help the first-time flow if you'd fill it out a bit.

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flier58

I think that perhaps the second line in the second stanza is a little too long, it also interupts the flow that works so well in the first stanza. Good piece though.

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