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Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc.

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Old 10-10-2003, 01:59 AM   #1
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An Existence of Fallacy

An Existence of Fallacy

The light sky
Filled by heavy darkness
Seeking the sun I find it
Waning
Shut out under a blanket
Of fluffy white down
It won't come out to play

Looking for the stars
This artificial evening harbours no light

The ships are at sea
Standing alone in the dark
Ghosts swoop at me
Voices rumble
Screaming crescendos
Falling as I fall too
Trapped in an icy prison

Feeling so alone
Wanting to explain
It's hard to talk of shadows

Sometimes I see hazy light
Running towards it
Bathing in acid sun

Seeing my hands
My feet
I confess to the ghosts
I cannot hold back

I yell
Holler for it to stop
Call out for darkness
As the sickly yellow light shines on
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Old 10-10-2003, 10:20 PM   #2
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This is rather good... Does not seem too bad! You must not be that awful at writing!
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Old 10-10-2003, 10:54 PM   #3
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Thanks Rage!

It's nice to be appreciated for once...My high school creative wrtiting instructor did'nt like it too much though, infact, "not liking it too much" is being rather mild about her reaction...
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