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Old 09-29-2003, 05:41 AM   #1
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DEPRATION

The thing is, this thing about life,
one minute things are fine,
and then the next we are faced with strife;
what happened to life's divine...
~*~
I know you know what I'm talking about,
I don't need to raise my voice,
nor do I need to shout;
we really have no choice...
~*~
One minute we are as happy as can be,
the next thing you know whammie,
depression is all we see;
we sit for days in our jammies...
~*~
We really don't know why,
or at least that is how it is with me,
it won't go away, no matter how hard we try;
depression won't set us free...
~*~
Answer me this, if you will,
how can some thing touch us enough
to make sadness what we feel;
making emotions untrue...

I mean, everything is dandy,
happiness surrounds me,
everything tastes like candy;
blue skies are all I see...
~*~
And then HELLO...here I am,
depression is my name,
and all I can say is damn;
I can not handle this game...
~*~
What hidden emotion will it be this time,
how many memories will I run through my mind,
to jot them down in some nifty rhyme;
just hoping the answers to depression I'll find...
~*~
How long will it last,
hell; it may never go away,
or it may be gone very fast;
my God, what if it stays...
~*~
So, here's to the sadness in my heart,
I can't quite touch the depths of my pain,
I don't know where it did start;
this time will I go insane...

Tomorrow could shine brighter than today,
so I'll just hold on tight; yes with all of my might
for tonight I will let depression have it's way,
I won't run again; this time l stand to fight...
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Old 09-29-2003, 05:53 AM   #2
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is this a song or a poem?
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Old 09-29-2003, 03:51 PM   #3
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hmm, this is much better and less vulgar then your usual poems, as well as much better. I know you know what I'm talking about is a rather awkward line,I don't know where it did start, should maybe go "I did not know would start it start" because what you have there does not sound right. just hoping the answers to depression I'll find... should probably be rephrased as well. Anyways, good job on this one, it is much better than your other works!
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Old 09-29-2003, 06:30 PM   #4
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Much better than your previous poems. Congratulations on the fast improvement
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