Purple and Blue - Writers Forum

Darkshine · 09-26-2003, 09:09 PM

Staring at the wall,
reflecting anxious dreams
I fall.

Downward, downward.
To the top.
Peak again before I drop.

Lullabye so rich so clean,
whatever stupid poets mean.

I'm cast aside.
I'm filled with doubt.
It's upside-down.
I'm inside-out.

Look out the window,
filled with fear.
Flamingoes shead
their neon tears.

We all cry this way,
ain't it true?
Sadness expressed,
in our own hues.

Give it up,
I'm bound to lose.
I cry tonight
in purples and blues.

*I don't know what this is...this kinda stuff is all I can write right now, what do you think?*

**Penelope** · 09-26-2003, 09:23 PM

I think this is freaking fantastic! A jumble of thoughts all welded together!
'stupid poets' LMAO

Darkshine · 09-26-2003, 10:11 PM

Haha...a lot of poets are accused of stupidity. I know I have been many times and sometimes I believe it! "So much talk about nothing," as my boyfriend would say.

"freaking fanatasic", are you serious? That's pretty high praise if you are! Thanks.

**Penelope** · 09-26-2003, 11:03 PM

AdamR · 09-26-2003, 11:04 PM

I enjoyed it much. I like the line "Sadness expressed in our own hues." Good job!

Darkshine · 09-26-2003, 11:18 PM

Thank you both! I wasn't sure if I was just hitting one of those writer's blocks so I thought I'd get some opinions. Helps out a lot.

SD · 09-27-2003, 12:43 PM

end rhyme police here...nice but must it always rhyme....babywhine...

SD

Darkshine · 09-27-2003, 01:47 PM

I rushed through a bunch of poems I wrote the past couple of days. They were rather odd, especially for what I'm used to. I'll keep in mind the rhyming next time SD, if you insist.