AdamR

Something I cooked up today. I don't know what I think of it...maybe you can tell me.
I'm not much of a poet...more story.

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What will the days bring?
What will I know?
How will I grow?
We'll never know what the days will bring.

Over and over again
We search the question
Not accepting the suggestion
That we'll never know what the days will bring.

Mystery haunts us
Common sence has no say
We'll search again every day
But we'll never know what they days will bring.

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Darkshine

Adam- I liked the flow of this poem, but I really don't much like the rest of it. Too much repetition and redundency. The rhymes were kinda simple as well. Didn't really grab me. *shrugs*

I think you could do some good to try and drop the need to so much. Anyways, I understand cause I'm definately more of a poet than a storyteller. Keep at it though, practice makes perfect!

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AdamR

Darkshine, thanks for the comments. I've never been a poet, never have, and probably never will. But I'll stick with it and try again, and improve next time.

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Darkshine

Anytime! It's good of you to keep trying, makes you stronger in general too.

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SD

Everyone's a poet.

SD