Intricacies of Remembrance - Writers Forum

SD · 09-26-2003, 02:05 PM

Graves of wood or pottery,
which does one remember best?
Is it for the bowl or chest
that one recalls the man?

The word is heard,
the songs do echo

as memory is served.

The vessel
does not dictate

the passion.

Darkshine · 09-26-2003, 04:34 PM

So very true.

I liked the words, not the poem itself as much. It didn't seem to have your normal flow to it.

It's okay though, still enjoyable. I know I do that a lot myself...kinda write poems that are more short, short stories or descriptions than poetry.

SD · 09-27-2003, 09:32 AM

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Originally Posted by Darkshine

So very true.

I liked the words, not the poem itself as much. It didn't seem to have your normal flow to it.

It's okay though, still enjoyable. I know I do that a lot myself...kinda write poems that are more short, short stories or descriptions than poetry.

This was one of those more thought through poems, pondered a great deal about what words to use. I guess I thought too much, and there's little spontaneity involved. I came up with the first line and thought it had a nice ring to it, and I guess the rest was a little too forced.

**Penelope** · 09-28-2003, 07:08 AM

I think your usual style is more endearing and worthy of debate. This gives the answer rather than begging the question.