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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
09-24-2003, 02:51 AM
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Location: New Jersey
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AT HOME IN ARLINGTON
It was barely a year ago
We heard the bugler's call
The plaintive strains of Taps
Cut through the silence on the Mall
With heavy hearts and heads bowed low
We struggled to stem the tears
And as we said our last farewell
Our minds wandered through the years
Husband...Father...Brother...Friend
Each role you played with grace
Ever present by our side to share
The burdens that we'd face
Your grandchildren were your greatest joy
And they returned that love
(I know that you're still guiding them
As you watch them from above)
You were a fearless Soldier
The Country is in your debt
You earned that 21-Gun salute
That we will never forget
You were unique...unlike any other
Your equal will never be found
So sleep in peace, my Brother
In Arlington's sacred ground
*Written for my brother John, on the first anniversary of his death.
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09-24-2003, 06:01 AM
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Profound Writer
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May your brother Rest In Peice...
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09-24-2003, 06:16 AM
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has anyone ever attempted not rhyming their poems? i think you need punctuation as well
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09-24-2003, 06:18 AM
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I have done it many times. Pick me, pick me! *smiles*
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09-24-2003, 06:21 AM
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oh good. it just seems all of what i've read recently has had rhymes squeezed in wherever possible in a vain attempt to create rhythm and structure. good poets don't use too many rhymes or if they do they are not obvious.
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09-24-2003, 08:04 AM
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Bea: Your poem is a tribute to someone you loved. I respect that emotion.
I think your comments reflect a personal bias godisthyname. Posting them on this thread demonstrate your ability to be considerate.
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09-24-2003, 08:41 AM
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Beatrice: Wow, very beautiful poem to credit someone close to your heart. You are an elegant and emotional writer.
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09-24-2003, 11:07 PM
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Steven, thank you so much for your condolences...it is appreciated!
Pen and Darkshine, thank you for recognizing the poem for what it was...an emotional tribute, not a testament to my literary prowess.
Let's keep this forum as it always has been, (most of the time) a friendly, family like group, who are totaly sincere in helping each other out, not in childish bikering! 
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