Darkshine

With nothing left to hope for,
I got up and left you there.
I walked the path so simple,
ignored the one that "wanted wear".

Costly vows of ignorance
haunt me nightly in my head.
I feel your hand upon my face,
and wake sweating in my bed.

I feel the pillow next to mine,
no curly hair I touch.
And when my arms search 'round the bed,
no handsome man I love so much.

Watching endless moonlight,
your shadow lurking in my room.
I'm insulted by my innocence,
it's my fault you left so soon.

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One question: The Frost reference in this poem...well placed or trashy and cheap? I can't decide. I think I like it though.

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Penelope

Loved the whole damn thing! My fave line was:

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Rage2Fury

Same here, very well done! *smiles*

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gordon

So visual my sort of poem well done i enjoyed this a lot

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Darkshine

Penelope- I think that's my favorite line too. I was debating between saying that and changing it to "I'm insulted by my ignorance". I think "innocence" was definately the better choice.

Steve- Thank you to you too!

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Darkshine

Thanks to you too Gordon. Visual representations of emotions strengthen the poet's message...don't you think?

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SD

Costly vows of ignorance
haunt me nightly in my head.

Love this line!!! The rhythm is wonderful!! The word 'haunt' is really onomatopoeic, and I love how you combine it with 'nightly' and 'head' - - sounds good in my head - can't explain it.

Darkshine, you marry sentiment and image very well. Keep it up.


SD

Darkshine

Thank you SD, poems like this are the result of my sleeplessness nights. I get in situations and words just start coing into my head like poetry.

I was lying in bed and I think I thought of that very line you referenced, the whole poem springs up from there. I'm very lucky to be able to do that. Makes my life alot easier!

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"The trouble with poets is they talk too much."
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