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09-21-2003, 07:31 PM
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Where did it go?
LOSS.
Where did we lose it?
Compassion
Guilt
Caring
Suffering
Hope
Faith
Belief
It’s gone and we didn’t even notice as it closed the door.
Ashamed to hang around
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09-21-2003, 07:37 PM
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Maybe we were all talking too loud! That happens sometimes. We all lose too many things.
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09-21-2003, 11:59 PM
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Ohhh..I like Gordon. Any particular influence?
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09-22-2003, 06:20 PM
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No influence just came from somewhere on the moment
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09-22-2003, 06:29 PM
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Ah. I asked that because it reminded me somewhat of the questions people are asking themselves over here in America. Kinda like..."what went wrong?"
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09-22-2003, 06:33 PM
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To young a nation trying to hard to tell everyone what to do
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09-22-2003, 06:42 PM
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Hah, don't even get me started Gordon. No one wants to hear Amanda on her political soapbox.  
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09-23-2003, 05:30 AM
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The last word rubs me the wrong way... the end rhyme kinda takes away something. I would have left out the last word 
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09-25-2003, 07:29 AM
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Is this not absolute shite?
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09-25-2003, 08:28 AM
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Nice to see the guest critics keeping there end up
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09-25-2003, 02:55 PM
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Originally Posted by gordon
Nice to see the guest critics keeping there end up
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Don't worry about it, G. They are all poet-wannabees too chickens**t to post any of their own stuff. Their LOSS and our gain, I'd say...
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09-25-2003, 03:00 PM
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LMFAO 
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09-25-2003, 03:06 PM
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Originally Posted by gordon
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09-25-2003, 03:24 PM
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Originally Posted by SD
The last word rubs me the wrong way... the end rhyme kinda takes away something. I would have left out the last word |
I'd quite agree, but generally, I dig the poem. Reading it, I could imagine a bass player strumming rythmically behind the poet.
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09-25-2003, 06:48 PM
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sd done word gone
I think you were right works better
Thanx
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