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| Poetry Poems, Haiku & Tanka etc. |
09-17-2003, 03:50 AM
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Mentor
Join Date: Jun 2003
Location: New Jersey
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THROUGH THE LOOKING GLASS
She caught a glimpse of herself
As she passed the looking glass
But a stranger was staring back at her
Then she saw who it was, alas!
Where was the beauty of yesterday
Her black hair shining and curled
Her porcelain skin, smooth and firm
Preparing to face the world?
The woman appearing before her
Was gray-haired, tired and worn
Her face was lined with wrinkles
Mirroring the trials that she had borne
Her husband never minded them
He told her to "wear them with pride"
"They're proof that you have lived, my dear"
And he caressed them before he died
Facing herself in the mirror
She said, "it doesn't matter what I see"
Then she turned away and smiled
At the memory of what used to be!
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To a Sr. Citizen, age is an attitude, not a number...To the young, attitude will get you fired!
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09-18-2003, 06:41 PM
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Ink Slinger
Join Date: Sep 2003
Location: Canada
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That was a good poem. The ryhming was good and the poem charming. I sometimes think about what it would be like to be very old (not much though, I'm only thirteen!) Well, I can't think of any useful constructive critisism here, as this is a very good poem, so I will just compliment it. Keep up the good work.
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09-18-2003, 07:01 PM
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Profound Writer
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That part about the husband dying sent chills up and down my spine. It was quite saddening. Great poem!
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"You're never too old for Rock'N'Roll, because it's in your heart and in your soul."
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09-18-2003, 08:47 PM
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Mentor
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Thank you Farror. I'm honored to think that at 13, you thought my poem was "cool"! As for your feelings on old age, at 13 yrs of age, I thought 20 was OLD...now, at 75, old age to me, is someone in their 90's! (I''ll let you know what it feels like to be old, when I get there! 
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To a Sr. Citizen, age is an attitude, not a number...To the young, attitude will get you fired!
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09-19-2003, 11:30 PM
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Mentor
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Location: New Jersey
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Hi Steven, Sorry it made you sad...Actually, the poem is really an affirmation of hope and acceptance. (Since you can't do much about it, you might as well make the best of it!) 
Glad to come across a fellow music lover. Mozart and Beethoven help me get through the day! 
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To a Sr. Citizen, age is an attitude, not a number...To the young, attitude will get you fired!
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09-20-2003, 01:26 PM
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Profound Writer
Join Date: Sep 2003
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They sure do. It wasn't so much sad, but the thought of it...
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"You're never too old for Rock'N'Roll, because it's in your heart and in your soul."
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