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Old 05-13-2003, 10:47 AM   #1
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She - A sonnet

She

How can she change when she is perfectly
Unflawed as mornings crisp before the dawn,
Where hidden birds let go their ballads, free
To taste the wind of weary winter gone.

How can she leave when her departing fuels
The flames that rend the life from blesséd skies,
And leaves me to the wrath of angry swells,
Engulfed by wraiths of blacken'd sea disguise.

How can she fade when I so steadfast try
To halt the ocean shifting forward tides,
For through my eyes she lacking wings can fly,
An ageless hawk above the rest she glides.

How bittersweet a maiden she can be,
Reviving sight but leaving blinded me.
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Old 05-31-2003, 07:40 PM   #2
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I enjoyed the melody of the piece. Your rhyme placement was just right. I can hear the flute in the background as the poet/singer recites your piece to an enraptured audience. Nice job

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a great tribute to the sonnet style. lovely imagery.
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