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  1. 06-27-2012, 03:10 AM #1
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    the plaster grins

    Oh well, I missed the competition so I'll put it here instead.

    the plaster grins

    lies beneath
    polished plaster grins
    rot riddled
    cracks begin
    chalk flakes off
    a once stable base
    and crumbles apart
    façade to face
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  2. 06-27-2012, 05:24 AM #2
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    Nice imagery, assonance and alliteration.
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    Rolls off the tongue nicely, and I love that last line.
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    Thanks Rob and Cindy. Glad you liked it.
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    I really like the way you pen poems, Mr. V. They use words very economically and efficiently to drive a strong point home. A very fluid read, too!
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