Thread: Sitting in the silence

Sitting in the silence thoughts and desires.
Some long forgotten, some new, arise in my mind.

Images of a wish. A wish to be.
The wish to be the girl I should have been.

Born to the wrong body. Dying was my lot.
Now waves of depression and despair.

Shall I forever be so trapped?
Or die to set my spirit free.

I've seen the light, no eye can see.
That perfect love from the great beyond.

By light and love, live my life.
Hoping to be one day, the girl I should have been.

I really liked it Scott. It was amazing. Keep writing.

I think it has a good idea behind it but there are some structural problems that kind of throw the poem off.

For example, the line: Images of a wish. A wish to be." is a little bit....overdone. I understand where you're coming from but it just doesn't work.
Simply: Images of a wish packs a much bigger punch.

Also, I think it would be better sans the last line. So, you'd just have the thought provoking, thrilling ending:By light and love, live my life.