Thread: Relatively Speaking

Discerned, he rose again
From a feathers bothered
Bristle

In-between the weight of places
To which men gasp in vice

He concerned himself
Only in measure of Newton’s Law

Compound in what it was
Failure depends
Only if he wished to be tickled
By old Isaac
For taking too much of his time

Discerned, he rested once more
Prior to the feathers bother
Bristle

The general relativity was
The bold line between where

Hearts beat
And where man takes plunder

He concerned himself
Only in measures to that which had parented
the previously stated

From there
I stood up with my gift,
The feather,
And proceeded on my path

Nicely done - there are lots of places where the diction and rhythm flow very bouyantly - my favorite stanza is:

Discerned, he rested once more
Prior to the feathers bother
Bristle

I haven't an inkling of what it means, but it does roll off the tongue nicely : )

---todd

thanks for reading,

it was kinda a based fact assumption
newtons law of gravity
that the man was relativley likley to still be breathing

the test was to tickle him with the feather
and evidently he was breathing
as time is in fact repetitive and
as cruel as it might be to tickle someone in their sleep

none the less he collected his data
and moved on