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    To Dream

    Eyes Closed.
    Darkness Descends.
    Sparks of Light.
    Journey Begins.

    Where I go.
    No one knows.

    Flying High.
    Above the clouds.
    Peaceful freedom.
    All for me.

    Where you go.
    No one knows.

    Wonder, Mystery.
    Intrigue, Happiness.
    Peace, and Love.
    Await us there.

    Where we go.
    No one knows.
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    I like the flow of this and the staccato sentences. The next-to-last stanza becomes more fluid, and then the refrain again - very nice
    ---todd
    A growing collection of writings at my blog: Poems and Vignettes
    Also check out the latest installment of The Catholic Sojourner

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