Thread: Who Depression Is

Depression is this little man.
That sits on my shoulder.
And has the weight of boulder.
All day he remains perched.
Whispering lies into my ears.
Degrading and shameful thoughts.
He tells me that I am nothing.
I am worthless, he says.
And as the day progresses,
So does his weight.
Overbearing, almost crushing me.
He pushes me into a dark corner.
And keeps me there,
Wallowing in self-pity.
But I am not fooled,
By his seeming invisibility.
I see him there,
And I know that he is the cause.
So I simply reach up,
Pick him up by the scruff,
Look into his scrawny, reddening face,
And laugh a hearty laugh.
And while he swings at me with his little arms,
I tell him how worthless he is.
That he is nothing.
Then I toss him aside.
And walk on with a spring in my step.
Leaving behind depression.
And embracing life.

I can relate to this in so many ways... I like the lines 'that sits on my shoulder and has the weight of a boulder', again that strikes a chord with me. If we could all find the way to tell him' how worthless he is' and follow your words in the closing lines then life would be a hell of a lot easier. I like this poem, it has simple and easy wording but conveys the message accurately.

Yeah, that guy is such an asshole. Squish him flat!

Thanks CelticMist.

Lol Ilasir.

It seems like the end of the poem might be something darker, like realizing you the speaker, are depression, and that was yourself you just tossed behind calling worthless. But what can I say? I'm a cynical bastard.

I really like this poem because it manages to visit the dark side for at least a little bit before becoming inspirational, which saves us from feeling bored with typical inspirational poems.

One Question: Why do you have so many periods when the sentences aren't over? If you reach the end of a line and its reasonable as a sentence, then I can understand a period, but so many of your lines are already end-stopped anyways, you don't really need to add distracting and slowing periods at the end of every sentence. Unless you meant for those all to be seperate statements (which you didn't, your word choices tell me that much) or you were purposely trying to slow the poem down, in which case I would suggest you lose the periods and end lines with bigger words, something like melancholy, is a nice slow word that brings things to an almost screeching halt.

It's a good poem, nice descriptions.

Thanks JDegg.

Why do you have so many periods when the sentences aren't over?

like you pointed out, it makes the poem slower...and I like it that way.

I really like this poem because it manages to visit the dark side for at least a little bit before becoming inspirational, which saves us from feeling bored with typical inspirational poems

I enjoy dark poems too *grins maniacally*

It seems like the end of the poem might be something darker, like realizing you the speaker, are depression, and that was yourself you just tossed behind calling worthless. But what can I say? I'm a cynical bastard.

Nope, depression is thrown.

This is wonderful. Relateable. Enjoyed it.

And has the weight of s boulder.

Adjacent letters on the keyboard.

Originally Posted by Olly Buckle

Adjacent letters on the keyboard.

Ha ha! I cant believe I didn't even see that! XP Thanks Olly. Thanks Hello.

Love the manner in which you handled the subject, well done! You displayed a lot of finesse with this! Peace...Jul

Thanks Jul. I respect your opinion so it always good to have a positive comment from you :]