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    Red face awakening

    birds twittered sunny
    wittered lullabies,
    had sycomere trees in figgles
    wriggling out of shree.
    branches twiggled
    tuckled as they danced
    as if to flutty pianny singing cues,
    leaffy tuffle greens
    raffled as they clapped
    to tuny rythmic cliptic wizzing pass,
    river raggled ingled chanting raps
    scattering purple pleasures
    in return,
    and freshly watered ringlets sighed
    in awe
    of such motion raptic sounding play,
    the sleepy foliage tingled all shook up
    waking floppy hazy at the scene
    flashing lashes criptic of a dream,
    colours, rollers, boppers, gilded in a bow
    shaking
    tiny clusters crizzled in a dew
    ''oh what a dazzling pristine revery view!!
    the rain chuckled
    ringing smiling wits,
    and
    clouds as highs as twinkle lapsing rays
    of whitlet, pinklet, violet gracy blue
    dwinggling drafty, crafty, magi waves
    of happy gracious morning to us all.
    Last edited by Nacian; 11-05-2011 at 07:54 PM.

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    Nacian - Will you please use the spell checker provided by the Go Advanced button, it would make your poems much easier to read. The words in red don't exist. Apart from that it lapses into nonsense verse at times - Good fun, but nonsense nevertheless...

    birds twitteredsunny
    whittered lullabies,
    had sycamore tree in
    figgles
    wriggling out of glee
    the branches wriggled
    muckled as they danced
    the leaves in waffles
    raffled as they clapped
    to
    tuny rhythms whizzing pass,
    the river
    raggled ingled chanting raps
    scattering purple pleasures
    in return,
    of freshly watered rings in awe,
    the sleepy foliage tingled all shook up
    woke up floppy hazy at the scene
    flashing lashes of a dream
    colours rollers in a bow
    shaking
    tiny clusters shiny dew
    to such a dazzling godly view,
    the rain chuckled
    ringing smiling wits
    and
    clouds as highs as twinkle rays
    dwinggled drafty little waves
    of happy morning to us all,

    Last edited by Bloggsworth; 11-05-2011 at 05:22 PM.
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    Dear Bloggsworth, thank you for the reminder..I am actually spell checking as I type.
    thank you for reading my little piece.
    I am also trying to use words, although not the dictionary, for fun.
    I am sure that this allowed in poetry..
    the reason I also do that is because my vocabularyis not as rich your vocabulary, because you are a native speaker, and therefore I am hoping readers will appreciate that sometime I get frustrated and so I just make up words to go with the poem.
    I have amended the poem and changed or added few things.

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    Red face

    It is different from this


    birds twitteredsunny
    whittered lullabies,
    had sycamore tree in
    figgles

    wriggling out of glee
    the branches wriggled
    muckled
    as they danced
    the leaves in waffles
    raffled as they clapped
    to
    tuny
    rhythms whizzing pass,
    the river
    raggled ingled
    chanting raps
    scattering purple pleasures
    in return,
    of freshly watered rings in awe,
    the sleepy foliage tingled all shook up
    woke up floppy hazy at the scene
    flashing lashes of a dream
    colours rollers in a bow
    shaking
    tiny clusters shiny dew
    to such a dazzling godly view,
    the rain chuckled
    ringing smiling wits
    and
    clouds as highs as twinkle rays
    dwinggled
    drafty little waves
    of happy morning to us all,



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