Thread: Check mate, My love (Language)

The ball is in your court
Time for you too choose
Take everything else
Or the one that's been true
It's no guarantee
That things will work out
But this man here
Is craving, no doubt

Always been there for you
Whether money or presence
Don't you remember
All the money for presents?
Beyond what I provided
For your materials
What took away from
My prime material?

Sometimes I wonder
Why all this happened
What did I do
To cause your actions?
You tell me I was worth it
But that you don't deserve it
We were a goldmine in love
And you quit the game
You took the loss easily
I stayed the same

The minute I saw
Myself kiss another
Flashes of your face
And nobody other

Bleeding my heart out
The tears I shed
While you were out drinking
I was in my bed
While I was out thinking
You were in another bed

A clueless fool I was
Broken heart in pieces
I didn't wanna read it
So I had to see it
You pushed me away again
Said you weren't ready
The dude you used to trash
You were with him already
What did he have
That I couldnt supply
Other than a wigger life
And getting fuckin' high

Still to this day
Your in HIS arms
But confessing to me
All my love you've harmed
I can't take anymore
Games to be played
One more precious minute
With you, I prayed

If there's "no chance in hell"
Then leave me be
I'm a lost soul now
You set me free
No where to go
No feelings to feel
You are the core of my heart
And it's too bad this is real

No one last kiss
No one last hug
You gave what was mine
To some broke ass thug

The woman I thought I knew
The woman I loved
Would have left everyone
For her ONLY one
I can't help but love
When I know I should hate
Just give me closure Rosey
This is check mate

Other than a wigger life
And getting fuckin' high

You gave what was mine
To some broke ass thug

Here's anger as well as hurt. How could you! Bad enough you left ME, but for HIM? Good theme.
But the man doesn't acknowledge losing. Why not? Why declare checkmate, which indicates winning?
What did he win? Was his anger at her stupid choice enough to let him move on and say "good riddance?"

A bit uneven in parts, but has some good phrases. Also a bit long. I think it could be terrific with some editing. Replace or remove cliches: The ball is in your court – always been there for you – I can't take anymore, etc.

Thank you Phyllis. The speaker's head is in so many places. The 'check mate" means yes, either way he will be winning. But at the same time it means in the long run, at this moment he is boarder line crazy. The woman isn't his loss, it is hers. He is a man who just wants his love back. I will look over my piece and hope for a better outcome.