Thread: About: "A Thousand Angels Screaming"

Two motherless daughters, Firemajic and SilverMoon, must have sounded like A Thousand Angels Screaming this afternoon after we finished our collaborative effort to breath new life into one heartbreaking poem she authored.

It was like: You post it in your thread! No! You post it in your thread! Back and forth. Both very stubborn women, we. But she wore me down and won. And she "is" the winner. She put this out here.

Here's "Version Two" birthed from our Love, Sweat and Tears

A Thousand Angels Screaming

I stood there.
That site on Highway 67
like an innocent,
tracing twisted metal
with pointer finger,
to numb to tremble.

Shattered glass,
trampled grass,
blood splattered
on wild roses
now, odorous.

Three ambulances
Sirens mocking arias

One fire truck
Horn blast, the Beast’s trumpet

I closed my eyes and only
heard a Thousand Angels Screaming.


Casket,
the strong box,
for a diamond,
Crepe de Chine silk,
a love letter’s ribbon.

They surrounded you
in the dress
you wore to my wedding.

That day you never gave me away.

They seemed like strangers,
dozens of kinfolk and friends
thunderously grieving

while choir bellowed
“Amazing Grace”
to reach heaven’s ear

I closed my eyes and only
heard a Thousand Angels Screaming

Coffer closed
your cradle, now,
set in an earth hollow

A chasm I cannot cross.

My throat,
a tunnel,
backed up
with scars.

My enamel row,
the bridge,
my words
jumped off.

Blemished
Muted

I opened my eyes and only
saw a Thousand Angles Screaming

for me.
　
　
　
　
　
　
　
　

Many thanks Laurie, for taking this poem to a whole new dimension ...For speaking words I was too cowardly to give a voice to,and--
--for sharing my pain... With love and gratitude, Your friend and kindred spirit...Jul

Wow, sadness! My only critique:

coffer closed

I think must be, coffin closed? What does arias mean? It is my last name! lol

I equally honor you. And like I said, "We're pooped and our mothers are painting heaven red tonight!"

Sleep well. Love you, Laurie

Hi, Fossie.

"coffer" is a synonym for "coffin"

Definition of Aria:

• opera song: a melody sung solo or as a duet in an opera, oratorio, or cantata

Thank you for reading and for being sensitive to sadness. Laurie

Nice job, some good additions, but I'd definitely leave off "for me" at the end. The angels should scream at the tragedy for what it was, not just for one who grieves. Just my take.

Originally Posted by Phyllis

Nice job, some good additions, but I'd definitely leave off "for me" at the end. The angels should scream at the tragedy for what it was, not just for one who grieves. Just my take.

I love that ...also--for me, the angels screamed because I was struck dumb--unable to give voice to the killing grief, I knew if I started screaming, I would not be able to stop... Thanks Phyllis , peace,,,Jul