Thread: The Silent Gale (edited)

The whisper, the whimper,
all that can be said.
Caught in two worlds,
but neither in the other.

The wind is all I can say,
silent, am I, whenever the time came.
a gust, a gale, I wish I could say so....

But just the wind, just the wind, so.
But for now I see, all tragedy came from
not saying my being.

Should've spoken, but no....
Just a whisper, just whimper,
when I could have changed all with a gale....

I wish I knew WHAT tragedy you are writing about--then I could feel some connection to your poem, I do like the idea you have going on though...what could you have changed with a gale? Peace...Jul

Originally Posted by Firemajic

I wish I knew WHAT tragedy you are writing about--then I could feel some connection to your poem, I do like the idea you have going on though...what could you have changed with a gale? Peace...Jul

Thank you for your post.
The poem written above is talking about a few friends that have fallen in deep despair that I could've help them through. I only whispered them to stop, instead of shouting them to get out of the sin. and when I didn't whisper, I just stay silent and watched them fall. Their sin? They all wanted to be cool by smoking and drinking and I didn't stop them.

Oh.....well that makes sense...Now that I know the back story,this is very nice.Thank you...peace...Jul

Thanks for the reply.

This is genius.

I interpreted it before reading your explanation, and I connected it to my own far less terrible situation, but all the same... wonderful. The tone is great too, whispery just like the content. "A gust, a gale, I wish I could say so..." officially one of my favorite WF poems

Only thing that confused me was "neither in the other." What are you referring to there?

Originally Posted by Trides

This is genius.

I interpreted it before reading your explanation, and I connected it to my own far less terrible situation, but all the same... wonderful. The tone is great too, whispery just like the content. "A gust, a gale, I wish I could say so..." officially one of my favorite WF poems

Only thing that confused me was "neither in the other." What are you referring to there?

Caught in two worlds,
but neither in the other.

I wrote that part to show the two conflicts. I.E. you're seeing both teh conflicts and feeling them, like being in a world, but you're also not there and feel like you can't change it. There's also a few other things on why I wrote that part, but that's one of the main reasons.